This is a short poem? I recently got into poetry and I’m gonna get “milk and honey” by rupi kaur and apparently it’s beautiful and I’m so excited to get it! [UPDATE: I got it right now, and the concepts and meaning are pretty good]
I love poetry and respect everyone who can make something so beautiful and deep. I think my favorite poet would have to be Edgar Allen Poe. “The Raven” is so beautiful, it’s very dark and captivating.
Back on MY poem, I tried, okay? Since this might be a bit short, so I apologize for that (I also said that on my last post, go check it out okay sorry had to put in a shameless self promo)
the first time i met you,
you were a beautiful pink rose.
unique and ethereal
with such delicate silk petals.
but your beauty withered away,
you weren’t the pink rose i knew.
you showed me your true colors
and as tragic as it was,
i no longer loved you.
you didn’t stay for long,
you couldn’t and you never will.
i miss you.
Uh… this is my first poem, I’m not good with rhyming so I just decided to do a free verse. I know this is short, and I think I’ll do another version that’s longer but with a different meaning (but similar concept). I’m not sure if it flows or not, I think it’s meh, there are areas I probably lack in but whatever. I don’t think it’s necessarily a bad start for poetry? Not sure.
In my opinion, I think it’s okay. I know I have some sprucing up but since this is shorter than I anticipated, I don’t think I can judge my poetry from here. For people who are more experienced in poetry, I’m open to constructive criticism (just don’t be too harsh lol) and feedback. I really want to improve.
Alright, it’s official! I’ll make another version. Don’t know when, but I will do that soon!
Oh, and since I want to be more involved in the poetry community, are there any recommendations anyone has for poems? I want to absorb as much as I can, but until then…
Farewell! See ya in the next post!
[EDIT]: Looking back, I think I improved on my poetry. I learned to be more descriptive and use a lot of metaphors, I guess. Lol I still don’t think I’m well enough, but there’s plenty of room for me to improve 🙂